I believe Alissa Steiner's thesis to be, "Understanding depression, its symptoms and its consequences, can help us identify and help friends and family members who may be suffering. Also, if counseling services on college campuses were better able to publicize and reach out to students, perhaps more students could get help they need before it is too late." To me, she doesn't support this at all. She doesn't give any examples of how understanding depression, and/or, college counseling helps people who are truly depressed. She only tells the short stories of two students who were perfect on the outside, then turned out to be so depressed that they committed suicide. To make a claim, any claim, you need to give two or more examples supporting that claim. She doesn't do that at all, she only restates the same thing over and over again. I don't like how she basically used the essay as an advertisement for counseling on college campuses. She didn't analyze in depth why exactly college students are depressed, she only said that if they perhaps had gone to a counselor on their campus, they wouldn't have committed suicide. This essay really frustrates me because she never went into depth about the real issue; how colleges are depressing to students. If she had actually, fully analyzed that, with actual true facts, this would have been a much better essay.
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